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Ahh, if only all stories were this good.
I loved the description, the sense of anitcipation, the content. I like how the emotions reflect themselves and the flow of this story.
You can almost visualize this happening, a desolate grey graveyard where all that inhabits it or ever passes by is the rain or wind.
Thanks for the story, it's wonderful.
-qtbubblegirl
Ooh! What a fantastic story! And by fantastic, I mean it has wonderful fantasy aspects with odd, quirky details that make it all so much better! I totally "liked" it.
Still! Awesome story! 
My main comment would be to explain the infamous shrimp tail incident.
I would also make the part where she sees herself wayyyy more dramatic. But then again, I might just be a drama queen.
This is a great short story; something about it just has that heir of mystery and exciting foreshadowing. Your somewhat-simple style for some reason also makes it feel really personal. The only thing I would recommend is not saying "the man" so much when you talk about him in the graveyard, because it makes the section seem a little repetative (sorry, kind of picky about little things like that). Still, great!